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data/release-notes/enterprise-server/3-0/20.yml

@@ -5,12 +5,12 @@ sections:
   bugs:
     - Pre-receive hooks would fail due to undefined `PATH`.
     - Running `ghe-repl-setup` would return an error like `cannot create directory /data/user/elasticsearch:File exists` if the instance had previously been configured as a replica.
-    - In large GHES Cluster environments, the authentication backend could be unavailable on a subset of frontend nodes.
+    - In large cluster environments, the authentication backend could be unavailable on a subset of frontend nodes.
     - Some critical services may not have been available on backend nodes in GHES Cluster.
   changes:
     - An additional outer layer of `gzip` compression when creating a cluster support bundle with `ghe-cluster-suport-bundle` is now turned off by default. This outer compression can optionally be applied with the `ghe-cluster-suport-bundle -c` command line option.
-    - Upgrade collectd to latest version 5.12.0.
-    - We have added extra text to the admin console to remind users about the mobile apps'' data collection for experience improvement purposes.
+    - Upgraded collectd to version 5.12.0.
+    - We have added extra text to the admin console to remind users about the mobile apps' data collection for experience improvement purposes.
   known_issues:
     - On a freshly set up {% data variables.product.prodname_ghe_server %} without any users, an attacker could create the first admin user.
     - Custom firewall rules are removed during the upgrade process.

data/release-notes/enterprise-server/3-1/12.yml

@@ -7,12 +7,12 @@ sections:
     - Pre-receive hooks would fail due to undefined `PATH`.
     - Running `ghe-repl-setup` would return an error like `cannot create directory /data/user/elasticsearch:File exists` if the instance had previously been configured as a replica.
     - After setting up a high availability replica, `ghe-repl-status` included an error in the output like `unexpected unclosed action in command`.
-    - In large GHES Cluster environments, the authentication backend could be unavailable on a subset of frontend nodes.
+    - In large cluster environments, the authentication backend could be unavailable on a subset of frontend nodes.
     - Some critical services may not have been available on backend nodes in GHES Cluster.
   changes:
     - An additional outer layer of `gzip` compression when creating a cluster support bundle with `ghe-cluster-suport-bundle` is now turned off by default. This outer compression can optionally be applied with the `ghe-cluster-suport-bundle -c` command line option.
-    - Upgrade collectd to latest version 5.12.0.
-    - We have added extra text to the admin console to remind users about the mobile apps'' data collection for experience improvement purposes.
+    - Upgraded collectd to version 5.12.0.
+    - We have added extra text to the admin console to remind users about the mobile apps' data collection for experience improvement purposes.
   known_issues:
     - The {% data variables.product.prodname_registry %} npm registry no longer returns a time value in metadata responses. This was done to allow for substantial performance improvements. We continue to have all the data necessary to return a time value as part of the metadata response and will resume returning this value in the future once we have solved the existing performance issues.
     - On a freshly set up {% data variables.product.prodname_ghe_server %} without any users, an attacker could create the first admin user.

data/release-notes/enterprise-server/3-2/4.yml

@@ -8,16 +8,16 @@ sections:
     - Running `ghe-repl-setup` would return an error like `cannot create directory /data/user/elasticsearch:File exists` if the instance had previously been configured as a replica.
     - Running `ghe-support-bundle` returned an error like `integer expression expected`.
     - After setting up a high availability replica, `ghe-repl-status` included an error in the output like `unexpected unclosed action in command`.
-    - In large GHES Cluster environments, the authentication backend could be unavailable on a subset of frontend nodes.
+    - In large cluster environments, the authentication backend could be unavailable on a subset of frontend nodes.
     - Some critical services may not have been available on backend nodes in GHES Cluster.
     - The repository permissions to the user returned by the `/repos` API would not return the full list.
     - The `childTeams` connection on the `Team` object in the GraphQL schema produced incorrect results under some circumstances.
     - In a high availability configuration, repository maintenance always showed up as failed in stafftools, even when it succeeded.
     - User defined patterns would not detect secrets in files like `package.json` or `yarn.lock`.
   changes:
     - An additional outer layer of `gzip` compression when creating a cluster support bundle with `ghe-cluster-suport-bundle` is now turned off by default. This outer compression can optionally be applied with the `ghe-cluster-suport-bundle -c` command line option.
-    - Upgrade collectd to latest version 5.12.0.
-    - We have added extra text to the admin console to remind users about the mobile apps'' data collection for experience improvement purposes.
+    - Upgraded collectd to version 5.12.0.
+    - We have added extra text to the admin console to remind users about the mobile apps' data collection for experience improvement purposes.
   known_issues:
     - On a freshly set up {% data variables.product.prodname_ghe_server %} without any users, an attacker could create the first admin user.
     - Custom firewall rules are removed during the upgrade process.